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You live in a room which you share with another student. You have some problems with your roommate. Write a letter to the accomodation officer of the college to change your room. In your letter: *mention the problems you are facing *say how these problems are affecting you *request for a new room

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to you to request a new
room
 for my
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nest
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 term. I am a student who living your
room
 in which No.348. I hope you can help me to change my
room
. I am living in an
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apartment
appartment
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apartment
 with another person. He always
bring
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in
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apartment
appartment
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apartment
 and take parties,
some times
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 they make
loudly
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 noise. The noise bothered me
,
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 because I am a student, and I am preparing
my
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 exam during these weeks.
Other
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 thing that I cannot accept is that they often take away my items,
such
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 my bottle, my backpack or laptop,etc. I asked him
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not
bring
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 people into my
room
, and
do
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not
touch
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 my things. The situation has never changed.
Therefore
, I want to change
a
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new
room
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next
 term
,
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 and prefer a single
room
although
 the rental fee is higher than
this
 one. I do not want somebody
bother
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 me again. Thank you for your help. I am looking forward
for
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me. Yours faithfully, Kevin
Submitted by kevin. B on

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