Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are different opinions about the importance of
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. While some argue that
students
need a science of food
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process, others claim that
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the
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of formal education ought to outlay time for
students
. I, on my part, believe that
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should teach academic disciplines to study. To commence with the view on the former group, there are two reasons behind their position.
First
is that almost everyone faces cooking during their adult
life
. So it will be very fruitful to learn more about
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science and university. It can help them in the future
life
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when they become
adult
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adults
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.
For example
, In my whole
life
, I see how can cook meals: palov,
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,
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etc. These school subjects turned out to be more useful than I had thought.
In addition
to
this
, If people begin to tutor their offspring
first
, they will motivate as they aim to get the best scores in cooking.
Thus
, he
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will
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will
start his career earlier than the same age. Definitely, other arguments exist too, but the ones mentioned, I believe, do stand out. Turning to the latter group's point of view, they
also
have their own grounds to justify the position they hold.
First
of all,
education
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system need
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the university for
students
. So, It will understandable, why children and teenagers choose the subjects, they will need for their
further
education. And speaking about universities, we
also
have to comprehend that in
such
educational institutions people learn about everything.
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, If someone
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physically,
this
person prefers to spend time more
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, rather than
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food. The availability of other arguments is undeniable, but mentioning them is not worthy. In conclusion,
although
the opinions of people regarding whether
students
should spend time on important subjects vary, I am convinced that balance is most influential in our
life
,
thus
, I believe that every classman can choose their way.
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