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how much money people spend on petrol, in percentage in the United States and the United Kingdom.

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Introduction
The graph illustrates how much money people spend on petrol, in
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percentage
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 in the United States and the United Kingdom.
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In the US, the poorest economic
class
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 is the one who spends more money on petrol, reaching a peak of 5,5% of the income. After that the
the
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percentage
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 decreased steadily, and the minimum value that has
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been registered was 2,2%, spent by the wealthiest
class
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.
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Unlike the US, the UK values are the other way around and the
percentage
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 rose gradually throughout the graph. The poorest
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class
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 spent between 0,5% and 2,5% of their income,
then
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 the amount paid by middle-income fluctuated from 2,5% to 3,8%, later on, the graph levelled off at 3,8%.
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, it registered a peak of 3,9% by the richest group, and the
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 dropped slightly.
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Overall, the poorest and middle-income people
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in the US spend a higher amount of money compared with the
Conclusion
people in the UK who belongs to the same economic
class
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.

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