Some think that it is more important for children to engage in outdoor activities instead of playing video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
These days, almost every
types
of Change to a singular noun
type
sports
are popular. Some teenagers mostly spend Fix the agreement mistake
sport
leisure
time Correct pronoun usage
their leisure
with
playing Change preposition
apply
in
outdoor Change preposition
apply
activities
or video games. In this
essay, it will be considered about it
benefits and drawbacks with examples.
Change the pronoun
its
On the other hand
, everyone ,especially teenagers, should play outside activities
for their health. Besides
, in my country
there are all opportunities for Add a comma
,country
children
to engage in such
activities
. For instance
, there are gyms and stadiums equipped with modern sport
Change the noun form
sports
equipments
. Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
Thus
, playing sports
in outside activities
help children
to have fun in connection with nature. In addition
, again, it help
in a stressful state, tired of Change the verb form
helps
study
. So it is useful for health. Wrong verb form
studying
For example
, for strong muscles and good brain function. Therefore
, it is necessary to play in
outdoor Change preposition
apply
sports
to be healthy both mentally and physically.
On the other hand
, technologies are being updated day by day and it
make our life easier Correct pronoun usage
they
that is
why many children
think that playing video games is easier than other sports
. Also
, it may be easy, however
, they have their downsides. For example
, it reduces the vision of the eye. In addition
, it is a waste of time. Nevertheless
, almost 60 per cent of kids use it. The availability of other arguments are
undeniable, but mentioning them is not worthy.
In conclusion, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
factors
mentioned above show that outdoor Correct article usage
the factors
sports
are more beneficial than video games in every way. Also
, parents should encourage their children
to be active.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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