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As well as making money, businesses also have responsibilities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
In the long term,
this
 strategy could bring both sustainable profits and potential
customers
. Taking social responsibility, say philanthropic activities, means an investment in expanding the future's market. An explanation for
this
 argument is when helping impoverished people escape ingrained poverty and have a higher standard of living,
businesses
 are creating potential
customers
, and in turn, selling more products to these new generations of
customers
.
Furthermore
,
this
 strategy helps draw new
customers
. In fact, when taking social responsibilities,
businesses
 could create a picture of themselves as economic units not only generating wealth but
also
 willing to accompany them in reaching common goals and solving challenges.
This
 helps build trust and bonds between
businesses
 and the community, and new
customers
 will come later. In conclusion,
although
businesses
 are economic units generating wealth, they should
also
 shoulder social responsibilities because
this
 is a sapient investment in their sustainable development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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