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In many large cities, people wa ste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the roads. discuss causes and solutions?

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Increasingly,
people
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 deal of time due to traffic jams on the roads.
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disorders
disorder
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essay
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 I'll discuss causes and possible solutions. Nowadays,
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authorities
 worldwide have discussed a lot
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environment
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environment
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 the same leaders adjust some rules to increase the sales of cars
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 of boosting
investiments
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investments
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 in public
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facilities
fatilities
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facilities
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transports
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 and structures.
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several
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several
people
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 usually use their cars to commute from one place to another, certain
people
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 would like to have options to get around
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 and quickly, and while it doesn't happen, drivers have spent hours trying to get at home from
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job
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 to
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enjoy their families. In my mind,
authoraties
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authorities
 should construct subways and
replaning
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replacing
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 buses line to serve more users
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 and even bicycle paths for those who enjoy
commute
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 by bike. Still,
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society has no chance to find out another way for commuting to work and school, and as
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consequence
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, the
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number
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number
 of
polution
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pollution
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 the air has been getting more
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 each
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, an article published by Four Wheels magazine
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 brings up
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 which shows that more
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 80% of vehicles on roads are moved by fossil fuel, and
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 for
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environment
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enviroment
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environment
. In fact,
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health
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 public issue and politicians should be an example for humanity
buying
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 vehicles moved
by
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 clean fuel and creating rules for getting less the
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chemical
chemicals
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, possibly the number of cars on the street will be less and the traffic will become more
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. In conclusion, Traffic congestion mainly arises in city centres and it affects
people
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's life adversely.
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 from limited public transport along with shared the same schedule by city dwellers. I
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 recommended that governments can address
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 issue by investing in public transport infrastructure, and implementing some variations in working hours.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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