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Some employers are willing to give their workers a certain amount of unpaid sabbatical time, believing this benefits the individual and the organisation. Other employers see no merit in this arrangement and discourage it. Consider the possible arguments for and against unpaid sabbatical leave, and reach a viewpoint of your own.

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In today's era, everyone should get a
vacation
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 to refreshen up. Some employers are in favour of giving a holiday to their workers by believing that it is beneficial for their
company
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 while, others opine that it has a harmful impact on the industry. According to my perception, a holiday can make a person more energetic and it directly affects the
company
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 in a positive manner.
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 in favour of giving a
vacation
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 is individual can invest some
time
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 in himself rather than being a money-making machine.To explain it, a person can spend
time
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 doing their favourite hobby which helps him re-energise and more creative mind and when he returns to his job, he comes up with more efficient ideas which totally benefit the
company
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.
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, In 2016, the United States government started the project of providing a 14 days
vacation
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 in every field of work.
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, some people oppose the idea of sabbatical leave to keep their
company
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 and employees working at their usual
time
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. To support
this
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 idea, some employers believe that after the break, the employee takes some
time
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 to settle again which is
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 waste of
time
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. so, to keep running their business smoothly, they prefer their employees to keep in touch with their
company
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.
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, big farms where workers are less, tend to produce low results. In a nutshell, everyone has the right to live their life with freedom in which they can invest some
time
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 in themselves. Organizations should take care of their workers and give them some
time
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 to spend on other activities. They should believe that a
vacation
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 does not ruin their business but will help to prosper their organization.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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