Because of the global economy, many goods including what, we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Owing to
world
financial system, even earlier essential necessities are imported from the farthest Correct article usage
the world
countries
. It is highly lucrative. Firstly
, this
essay acknowledges its pron. In the following, it is described its cons.
In certain nations, suitable weather conditions make it feasible to grow enough essential food for thousands of hectares. So not only their people but also
who living
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live
in
other sides of the Change preposition
on
worlds
benefit Fix the agreement mistake
world
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from theses
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these
theses
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these
products
. What is more, in some countries
such
as China, due to overpopulation, a large number of workers are available which leads to reducing initial cost
. Fix the agreement mistake
costs
Therefore
, other countries
prefer to import their needs rather than domestic production. These mutual interactions not only lead to purchase
by the Wrong verb form
purchases
countries
in need,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
cause the sale of the products
in exporting countries
.
On the other side, shipping problems such
as long distances, the
possibility of financial and life losses due to Correct word choice
and the
nature
disasters, throw a spanner in the work. Replace the word
natural
Furthermore
it leads inflation to Add a comma
,Furthermore
generating
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in generating
country
because of Correct article usage
the country
shortage
in Correct article usage
a shortage
country
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the country
who
has dramatically exported Correct pronoun usage
that
its
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their
products
. Moreover
, users becomes
too dependent and after a Change the verb form
become
while
they could not survive without Add a comma
,while
other’s
need. In some cases, even Fix the agreement mistake
others’
tiniest
problem broke Correct article usage
the tiniest
international
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the international
relationship
. for instants in coincidental accidents, leaders blame each other.
To sum up, Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
countries
expand their relations by importing and exporting their products
from far distances in the far corners of the world. It has a lot of advantages and some rarely
drawbacks.Change the adverb
rare
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