Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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young
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time either watching Television and playing online or offline video
games
. With reference to
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, a group of
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people
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people
believes these activities are not helpful for
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mental health. In my opinion, I strongly agree or disagree with
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will try to discuss and
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of people who
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access to T.V and video
games
will lead to bad mental growth.
For instance
, it is sometimes become really difficult to monitor our kids and find what they are actually watching in their leisure time.
Also
, nowadays there are many
games
available which are pretty much violent in content.
Additionally
, spending more screen time not only leads to mental
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but
also
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psychological
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psychological
problems.
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overall
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development
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development
.
On the other hand
, I would like to put my idea regarding playing
games
or watching TV is not always obstructive, yes if it is in a controlled manner and taken as
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only mode of
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it will help to develop
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of a kid. To support
this
, I had come across one article, where it was mentioned playing
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games
to
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schedule may help
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younger, even adults
also
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thinking process, visual and logical thinking. In sum
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, I strongly
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that TV and
games
are not adversely affecting
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the growth of a child.
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in a timely manner will outweigh the drawbacks From my perspective, I believe that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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