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Nuclear power is far too dangerous. Therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources of energy such as hydroelectric power, wind power, and solar energy. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

#power #countries #ban #alternative #sources #energy #wind
The usage of nuclear
power
 has a long history of
danger
 and disaster.
Hence
, only several countries whose aware of the
danger
 but still
using
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 it as
energy
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an energy
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producer
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producers
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 and
the
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other country
using
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use
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 safer
kind
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 of alternative
sources
 like solar
energy
 or wind
power
.
Therefore
, I agree with the notion that using nuclear
power
 is far more dangerous and outweigh its benefit in
long term
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 utility.
Beside
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with
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the horror of nuclear usage history
such
 as
Hiroshima
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the Hiroshima
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 and Nagasaki
bombing
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bombings
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 in 1945 which make the city unhabitable until today.
Also
,
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the Chernobyl
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Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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 reactor meltdown
killing
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 many of its
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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 and has the same fate as Hiroshima and Nagasaki which are not
livable
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 for
an unknown decades
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unknown decades
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 ahead.
Additionally
, even if in
Indonesia
 we already had BATAN as
national
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a national
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 nuclear body
that
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apply
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is run
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run
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 by the government,
Indonesia
 still lack
of
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manpower with the only university that had nuclear courses as its main study is on Gajah Mada University in Yogyakarta.
Moreover
, with
Indonesia
's position as
tropical
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 country and abundant
of
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sun and wind especially
in
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on
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 the beach, we have the benefit of using it as our main
power
sources
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source
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.
Also
, we could educate people around it to
preserves
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 it together and
making
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make
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 a more sustainable approach so they
not
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do not
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 only
relying
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rely
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 on the government. To conclude
it
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, I agree that
nuclear
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the nuclear
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power
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power's
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danger
 still
outweigh
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 its benefit and
Indonesia
 already has abundant
energy
sources
 from
the
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apply
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solar and wind. The government and educated folks need to pay attention to it better and have
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a more
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more
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apply
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better understanding
to
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 how
put
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in
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it
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on
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to
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the
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better use for the nation.
Otherwise
, it would be a huge waste for
Indonesia
 and a possibility of
danger
 lurking if we still want to use nuclear as the main
energy
sources
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.
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