Schools are spending more time teaching subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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content
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learning theory it's best to teach them technical skills which help them earn a living hood. I completely agree with the statement and
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am going to elaborate in the following paragraphs on how technical skills are helpful.
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history is important to us,
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theoretical material cannot help us to earn employment. If one student spends more
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he comes out of college, he is ready for the job.
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them to find a job but
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stand out among the huge competition.
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a survey conducted by BSL International on students who worked during their college days found them more competent than others. It is true that learning new skills at an institution
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young adults
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overcome their fear and
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any learning required can be easily accessible at the college, while theory subjects can be learned easily by reading and understanding.
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the university of London has arranged a
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training institute to identify and train
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interest and make them
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field. In conclusion, despite theory subjects are important to know trends in the current era. I would strongly argue that learning technologies are paramount
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education which
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help
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adolescent to find their interest in their field
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living hood.
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