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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games Outweigh the benefits?

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In the recent computer era, the number of people who play online
games
 has been increasing rapidly. In accordance with the trend, there has been
continous
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continuous
 debate whether or not the phenomenon is beneficial for men and women who spend
time
 on it or,
on the contrary
, it is harmful
for
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 them. As
such
, I would like to list some
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examples
expamples
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examples
 of
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of playing online
games
 and
finally
 state my opinion that the drawbacks account
more
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 than the benefits. The
first
 advantage of engaging in computer
games
 is its connectivity to remote friends and
ability
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 to expand networks even
at
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in
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 isolated places.
For instance
, under
such
challenging
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a challenging
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 environment as COVID-19, children
as well as adults
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, as well as adults,
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 can have fun connecting
each
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with each
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 other and be able to keep
semtiment
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sentiment
 that they are part of society.
In addition
, by handling internet
games
, people can improve their PC skills which may be good for their future studies or career progressions.
However
,
on the other hand
, there are a few
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significant
signifinact
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significant
 disadvantages of devoting a lot of
time
on
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to
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video
vidoe
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video
games
. Namely, if a person became
addict
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 to
the
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apply
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games
 and
spend
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majority
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the majority
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 of his or her
time
 on them, they lose focus on their
jobs
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job
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 or studies.
Moreover
, in more advanced cases, they become reluctant to keep up with
society
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the society
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 where they used to belong.
Further
 risk
on
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to
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 their physical conditions can
been
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 seen when the situation
become
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 progressively serious. Some game addicts continue their
games
 sacrificing their
sleeps
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sleep
periods of sleep
nights of sleep
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 and they stop paying attention to
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the nutritions
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nutrition
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nutritions
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nutrition
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 they take. As a consequence, their health
deteriorate
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deteriorates
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 and there would be a high chance that they become sick. In conclusion,
although
 there are a few very good aspects of playing video
games
, I believe there are more risks than benefits when one
spend
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 too much
time
 on them. It is certainly a good tool to learn internet skills and connect with friends in
a
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apply
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difficult conditions,
however
, it can be a huge threat to avert people's attention from
study
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studying
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 or
work
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working
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.
Moreover
, it can be harmful
for
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to
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 their social and physical
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attitude
attutude
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attitudes
. As
such
, I have no doubt that there are more disadvantages than
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benefits
beneifts
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benefits
for
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to
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 playing video
games
.
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