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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. To what extrnt do you agree or disagree with the above opinion? What are the some of the job skills employers look for new employees.

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It is one of the most important things that universities must serve some useful
skills
 which are necessary for
students
 to succeed in their
work
.I totally agree with
this
 statement and discuss some
skills
that
is require
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 for new
employees
. It is usually believed that to succeed in
job
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the job
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sector
 there
need
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needs
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 so
many
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much
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 practical
knowledge
, those
knowledge
students
 can learn in their study
sector
.If they properly achieve different types of valuable things in university or college they can easily prosper in their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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.There are different practical
skill
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skills
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such
 as computer
skill
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skills
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, how to deal with people and how can communicate with people these
activity
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activities
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students
 can learn in their academic area.There
are
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is
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 various
skillful
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skilful
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experience
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experiences
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 that should learn by
students
 is necessary and without
these
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,these
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 they can not reach their goals and help their nation.
For
instance
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 it
shown
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 that about 90% of practical
knowledge
 is achieved
from
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at
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 university and college.In
this
case
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 our study
sector
 should improve their practical study. There are so many
skills
 employers look for
new
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in new
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employees
.
Firstly
 they search for
employees
 who
work
 properly and attentively.
Companies
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Companies'
Company's
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 success depends on
employees
 so they should need more
knowledge
 if they apply
in
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it in
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 their working
sector
.
Secondly
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,Secondly
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owner
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owners
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 look for
such
 workers who have
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teamwork
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team
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teamwork
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work
 experience because
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teamwork
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team
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teamwork
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work
 is a crucial
things
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thing
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. Computer
skill
 is another essential
work
 that must
be need
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be needed
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for
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by
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employees
.
For example
,50%of business success depends
of
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on
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 workers like how they
work
 and manage their job. In conclusion, university and college are the best
place
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places
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 to learn different practical
knowledge
thus
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and thus
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 can help to improve
work
skill
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skills
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and
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apply
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there are so many
skills
 that must need
for
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apply
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employees
.
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