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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace . Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake , regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer . What , in your opinion , should be the main function of a university ?

#people #universities #graduates #skills #workplace #function #university #access #sake #course #employer
Some
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believe
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 that preparing students to be
professional
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 in the workplace is the main function
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universities
 and others say knowledge is vital
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 its own, so using
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this
 is not important. I strongly agree with the
first
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Universities
 must take responsibility to do something to make
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 better society. The
first
 thing I should mention is that
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the
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societies need some reliable experts and scholars. As
universities
 are one part of
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 education system
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high
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 level, it is obvious, they must educate some
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 and give some
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data
datas
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data
those
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 are necessary to make
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experts who are able to solve problems and give
solution
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solutions
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 in all subjects.
On the other hand
, all nations can
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develop
develope
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develop
by
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 their capable denizens, and it is
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the universities
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universities
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universities'
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 duty to prepare them.
For example
, developed
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countries
cuontries
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countries
 have
high ranked
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universities
 that teach their students to be
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delighted
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employee
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employees
 in the
workplaces
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. Another point is that
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 knowledge is not stable in our
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minds
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 when we do not have to use them. I mean,
although
 people can know a lot about various subjects
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 when their
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
 is useless, it can be
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 little by little. So educating something those are unpractical is a wasting time and energy in
universities
, it is important, suitable and
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noticeable
noticeble
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noticeable
 information is represented by
universities
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according
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according
 to the subject of each major .
For example
, I had one course about religion meanwhile my major was advertising, to be honest, I don’t remember
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any thing
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 because it was not useable in any aspect of my life and my career. To sum up, teaching students to be functional experts in
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 is the most important
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role
rolle
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role
 of
universities
 to make
the
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 better society and use
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knowledge in the best way.
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  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
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  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
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  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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