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Employers sometimes ask people applying for job for personal information such as hobbies and interests, and whether they are married and single . some people say that this information may be relevant and useful . others disagree . discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Its became a trend for Hr or corporates to ask about your marital status Or hobbies . As these are very personal
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 to ask . Most people think these personal
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 should not be part of the interview. ,
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 Most of the time Hr ask these question to understand your inclination towards the relocation of your job or your family's responsibilities. Lets us discuss both views and later I will elaborate on my opinion .
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 Asking personal
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 is like identifying what kind of family responsibilities people have . Those applying for jobs will results in a
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 assessment by identifying hobbies , and whether the candidate has an introverted or extroverted
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 .Asking personal
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 like marital status will result in identifying the family responsibilities candidates have . Corporations like Walmart do
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 assessments by judging hobbies and hiring extrovert
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 traits candidates. ,
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Personality
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 based candidate evaluation is a widely recognised human resources practice.
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 psychometric evaluation has become part of the hiring
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.Mostly these have become outdated practices in the era of digitisation of Hiring , Nowadays most corporates are switching to AI-driven tools for Hiring . Where these question has lost their relevance. Tech companies like Meta have their AI-driven hiring
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 across the globe. To conclude, The hiring
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 has lost its relevance as most of the hiring is done by software screen . Gone are the days when application tracking systems or ATS were used for hiring which filled with numerous personal
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. So My personal opinion is that the hiring
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 should not have personal
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