Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Governments are always needing to decide where to invest whether in arts,
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extremist parties the decision between where to invest is much more complex and even the balance about spending on entertainment and public services. It
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that investing in cultural
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is a waste of money. Measuring the happiness and life quality of a population may tell a lot about the impact of investing in
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field.
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society and must be provided for the population. It is known that private companies provide paid events and entertainment for a lot of kinds of genre and contributes a lot dor the mental health of an environment.But not all
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people can afford it and the state has to take part
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necessary that governments invest in social events for a completely happier environment in all classes.
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it is very important
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access to culture. In São Paulo,
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, there is an event called "Virada cultural", it is a weekend full of concerts and cultural
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provided by the city for all of the people who want to go. ,
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kind of initiative has a huge impact on
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society because will
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information by all the wages classes. To summarise, investment in cultural
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generates good impacts on the environment. Whether is important for governors to invest in other fields, with the disposed analysis cultural
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generate a large amount of good impact on
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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