With the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched places. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of damaging such areas?

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Natural energy has been found and used for hundreds of years, people mine them wherever they found ,which will pollute our
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the process of mining ,it generates a lot of harmful things. As the demand for energy is becoming harder and harder, and the quality of life is becoming high, some people think that we should find them in some places inaccessible. From my perspective, the disadvantages of damaging
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areas are more than the advantages.
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looking for a source of energy in
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a place benefits us, for it protects our local
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, if we remove our local factory of oil to an inaccessible place ,the decrease of harmful gas would make us become more healthy.
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it is a kind of damage for those untouched places
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, while the damage to the natural
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will destroy relative wild animals.
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, in the process of looking for a new oil well, the soil and the river resource will be damaged,which gives rise to the destruction of habitats of wild animals relying on them. When a new well is found, the harmful gas generated in the process of producing petrol will pollute local air, causing the death of local birds flying through it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • unspoiled
  • hydrocarbon exploration
  • biodiversity
  • sustainable energy
  • renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental degradation
  • ecosystem conservation
  • indigenous rights
  • climate resilience
  • habitat destruction
  • infrastructure development
  • technological advancements
  • economic stimulus
  • social unrest
  • environmental conservation
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