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You are looking for a full-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam

#job #employment #agency #sort #skills #sir #madam
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The chart illustrates the kind of vehicles/transport used by children aged 5-12 to travel from house to school from 1990 until 2010 in one country. At
first
 glance, it is noticeable that the majority of children used to use none of
the
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transportation to move from one place to another in 1990. Followed by a bus which has around half of the number of walking.
However
, in 2010, these two modes of transportation - walking and bus - were in
second
 and
third
 colocation respectively. We can see that car passenger has a blatant
difference
 between the two years, with more than
5
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million
difference
. While
this
 category had a considerable rise,
on the other hand
, all of the other kinds of transport had a gradual decrease. Both Cycling and Walking and bus had a similar number in 1990, with less than
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million
difference
. To sum up, the five types of trips have a significant
difference
 between the two years, which shows that children are starting to use fewer individual vehicles and more public transport.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment agency
  • full-time job
  • industry
  • position level
  • responsibilities
  • relevant experience
  • job titles
  • achievements
  • technical skills
  • soft skills
  • certifications
  • training
  • eagerness
  • suitable candidate
  • availability
  • interviews
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