Graduates who cannot find work in their chosen field should be advised to do a second degree, rather than taking a job that does not interest them. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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increasing
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number of specialities and professions
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with experience.
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why I personally think that it is crucial for
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lives to keep seeking
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their beloved
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. Our
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takes a significant part of life
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why our happiness depends on the choice of our career. We can face a large number of situations when
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their jobs because they cannot be interested in what they are doing. To be fully involved in
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work
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process, understand and love it an employee should really get into it
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is going to be a routine
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only necessary for keeping yourself alive.
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requires
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immediate solvation as it may get harder with time to change your current place of
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. It is a quite widespread situation when
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understand more about the world they live in and
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their professions
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during studying their
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field so it may be easier to make the right choice
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try. We only live once so taking a
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degree is not a bad idea at all even if you can keep up with your current
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high-level education can upgrade your personality,
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and skills
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and teach you in a different sphere
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probably can expand your
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responsibilities. Another profit is that your employer may evaluate your courage and give you a better
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or
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promote you. By getting more and more information through
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source
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as a university,
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can expand
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knowledge and know better what he is capable of. To conclude, it is important for anyone to try another degree or profession if they are not happy with what they are currently doing as
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takes a huge amount of
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and
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may define our personal interests and qualities. With our profession we can expand our knowledge and be a real
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in
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sphere we are working in,
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witch
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I think is great. In my personal opinion
people
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that understand that their
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can’t interest them should keep trying in finding their way of living.
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