Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

It should be admitted that the 21st century being the era of more and more accelerating technological progress caused a dramatic shift in human priorities related to
art
and science. But what are the reasons for
such
changes and is there a way to attract society's attention to
art
again? For
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thing, due to the fact that the majority of the museums and
art
galleries in Russia have not been renovated for several decades visiting
such
places is considered an extremely mundane activity by many. Intelligent youngsters nowadays would rather go to some scientific club or, what is even more possible,
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one, because almost nobody will argue that
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sphere is one of the most
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for those who
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to archive success in their professional life.
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, it is widely known that the most famous artists had to live in poverty and could hardly make ends meet.
However
, some European or American
museums
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experience clearly demonstrates that
art
exhibitions can and must attract a huge audience. Taking into account the specifics and preferences of modern people who learn how to unblock
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their
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steps, owners should make their exhibitions more technological and interactive.
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,
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museum of NASA in Texas
offer
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visitors
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experience astronaut feelings in
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space ship
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while
Art
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gallery in Madrid let everybody
to
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create their own masterpiece and even sell it
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auction. To sum up, understanding the reasons for shifting interest from
art
to other spheres is a key factor for tackling
this
problem successfully
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it has been already done by some museums and galleries all around the world.
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of the achievements of science to the
art
sphere can attract a great deal more technological geeks than could be imagined.
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  • Technological advancement
  • Economic growth
  • STEM subjects
  • Job security
  • Financial success
  • Pragmatic
  • Utilitarian pursuits
  • Art education
  • Inclusive
  • Engaging
  • Contemporary society
  • Social issues
  • Environmental themes
  • Digital platforms
  • Virtual museums
  • Interactive art
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