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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that is is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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A growing number of people are of the view that there is no necessity to apply for a position in other companies during
the
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 whole life. Some of them believe in
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 of having
such
 experience. In my opinion, changing surroundings may improve skills, while it is a great chance to develop a personality itself. On
one
 hand, it is clear why some of us have never thought about an organisation change. It is always much easier and
comfortable
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 to have a
place
 in
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one
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team due to everyone
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 familiar.
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, a group of British scientists did
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research where they found that staying
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a
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one
 job
place
 for an extended time might prevent stress and burnout among employees.
Moreover
, there is always a fear that a new career
place
 will not be as suitable as the previous
one
.
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 mind creates to save a person from
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 danger of
unknown
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.
On the other hand
, there are some upsides
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 turning into a new professional
place
. The
first
one
 is
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professional growth and an ability to open other sides of the career which could rise a general interest
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 a job. What is more, there is an opportunity to increase a salary, get a promotion or even build strong connections with new colleagues.
Second
, every new working
place
 can be added to the future CV which is the key thing for young specialists who want to realise their ambitions. To conclude,
although
one
 part of humanity can not find a reason why changing a company is vital, the other aspires to have
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. Personally, if I had to make that choice, I would definitely hard work to have alternative work experience in my portfolio to become a great expert.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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