Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

In the current society, only
the
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minority of the population can say they have a dream
job
. A good
job
for me, would be the balance between money and satisfaction
however
, it is almost impossible to find a
job
with those qualities.
For
this
reason
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if I could choose I would
prefere
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prefer
a Big
payment
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pay
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than
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to
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a
job
I like. Working for a company you don't like or you don't share the same values can be
frustating
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frustrating
, but
in
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the end of the
day
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day,
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it is your salary that pays the bill.
for instance
, nobody
are
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able to be fully
satisfyed
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satisfied
in a
job
with a short payment for a long period, and I am a good example of
this
. I used to love my
job
, I was a Wedding Photographer and it was like a dream for some
time
. It was a stressless work, I loved to capture those special moments and turn
it
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in
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a
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long
last
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lasting
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memories
though
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through
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the pictures,
moreover
, after some
time
I
complited
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completely
completed
lost my passion for photography. When I did some
calcs
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calls
and I figured out that it would be impossible to
by
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buy
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my own house, and send my kid to a good school, I took the best decision of my life and
I
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quit.
Some
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time
after I found a
job
as an IT administrator in a financial institute, it was a nightmare but, the salary was very nice. I was always stressed and busy,
however
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however,
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I
were
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able to save money for a downpayment and now I accomplished my dream to
become
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becoming
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a
home owner
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homeowner
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.
on the other hand
, I don't have much
time
to enjoy my house as I am always working,
however
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the sensation of peace knowing that I can provide for my family is all that matters
for
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me right now.
Overall
, I
belive
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believe
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everybody prefers a big salary but, not everybody
have
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the courage to say it out loud.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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