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Today we can see overconsumption of natural resources such as air, fresh water, and oil and so on. The usage is increasing as a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this? What should be done to minimize this?

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Introduction
Nowdays
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,
pollution
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 has been
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spread
spared
speard
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spread
 in over the
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world
wolrd
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world
.
Therefore
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, fresh natural
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resource
resources
resouse
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resources
 would
decreased
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 in the surrounding.
as a result
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people
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 overconsumption of these
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resources
sources
rsourcese
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resources
. so,
resouse
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resource
resources
 have been declined in nature. It is
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already
alredy
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already
 reaching critical levels. there are many
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reasons
resonates
resones
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reasons
of
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for
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 declined natural
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resource
resources
resoure
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resources
. I will
be
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explain
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resonates
reasons
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the resones
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resones
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reasons
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 ensing Paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
To being with, there are various
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reasons
resons
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reasons
 of natural
resources
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 decreased
because
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apply
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people
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 think that in the
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future
fature
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future
 these
resources
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 may be
extinced
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extended
extinct
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people
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are overconsume
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are overconsuming
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 or store natural
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resource
resources
resouce
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resources
 like
air
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, fresh water and
fule
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fuel
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 and many
other
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others
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.
First
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 and foremost, these
day
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days
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Pollution
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 has been rose. So, fresh water,
air
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,
land
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and land
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 are polluted.
Hence
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, When
people
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consumed
consume
consumped
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consume
 polluted water and
air
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.
as a result
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, health issues
is
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are
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 created.
therefore
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,
people
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 think it use
to
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in
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future when
sortage
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shortage
storage
 would
be create
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.
Moreover
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, day-by-day inflation is growing
that
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and
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 in
future
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the future
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People
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 have
not
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no
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 idea
to
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about
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 natural
resources
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which
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at which
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 point reached.
Body paragraph 2
However
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, there are several solutions
of
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to
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 decrease consumption.
Groverment
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Government
 should take taxes on
overconsumption
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the overconsumption
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 of natural
resource
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resources
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.
For example
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,
people
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are
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apply
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store Oil because they know in future
that
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the
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 price will be on
pick
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the pick
a pick
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. So,
people
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illegal
illigal
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illegally
 store of
fule
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fuel
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.
therefore
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,
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government
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the government
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 should take action or
government
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 should take higher taxes on that. In
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addition
addtion
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addition
,
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phone
one
peone
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people
 can
also
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to
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apply
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reduce
Pollution
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. they can use public transportation which
decline
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declines
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air
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pollution
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.
Conclusion
Overall, over the world has
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suffering
stuffing
suffing
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suffering
with
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from
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global
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the gobal
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gobal
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global
 warming problem. So, natural
resources
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has
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have
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 been polluted which
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already
allready
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already
create
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creates
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critical
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a critical
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 situation on the earth.
Therefore
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,
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government
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the government
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 should take action and
people
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 should
also
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 support the
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government
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government's
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 rule.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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