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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the issues of global
climate
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changes
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change
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has been
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 increased which
is
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directly
effect
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affects
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on
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business
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. Some people argue that
variation
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variations
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 in
weather
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conditions
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 might cause
of
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irreversible to damage the
business
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.
while
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,
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 individuals think that
changeable
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climate
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get
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gives
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 more opportunities
in
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 work. I
willl
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will
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 matter. Examining the
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former
 view, there are many
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negative
 effects of
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 breakdown. The
business
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 of agriculture and fishing industries
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effected
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affected
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to
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by
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weather
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conditions
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, these days farmers do not grow sufficient seasonal
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crops
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 because of
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 change. Sometimes in the monsoon season no rain so,
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 yield
has become
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decreased
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decreases
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.
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, farmers have no money to harvest other crops and market demand has
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increased.
In
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the
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results
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, inflation has
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increased.
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, the
affect
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 of
weather
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condition
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conditions
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of
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on
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sea
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the sea
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 level has
become
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significantly increased so, it
effect
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on
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fishing industries.
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, for many companies, the changing
weather
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conditions
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 are
affirmative
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 way to grow.
This
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 is because
climate
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changes
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change
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create
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creates
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 new demands.
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, In 2019, Dehli was covered to smoke in the month of October and
according to
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 the survey of
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 of India in
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 month
sells
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sales
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 of air-purified and anti-pollution
mask
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masks
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 increased by around 100%.
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, poor rainfall
rise
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raises
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demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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rain water
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rainwater
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 harvesting has
been
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increased. In the same way , hotter
summer
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summers
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 provide manufacturers a great opportunity to sell more fans and air-conditioners. In conclusion, some people argue
business
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 depends on
weather
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conditions
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 and it creates
nagative
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negative
affects
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effects
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 on the
business
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.
While
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,
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 others convey that
business
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 depends on
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but
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apply
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also
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 it gives opportunities
many
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to many
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 companies.
However
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, my opinion is that later
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viewpoints
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 because the
business
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 are capable
for
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of
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 the changing needs of society.
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