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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #climate #change #effect #business #opportunities
Nowadays, the issues of global
climate
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directly
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business
. Some people argue that
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weather
conditions
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irreversible to damage the
business
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while
,
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 individuals think that
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climate
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 more opportunities
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 discuss both points of view and give my personal opinion on
this
 matter. Examining the
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former
 view, there are many
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negative
 effects of
climate
 breakdown. The
business
 of agriculture and fishing industries
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effected
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affected
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to
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weather
conditions
.
For example
, these days farmers do not grow sufficient seasonal
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crops
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 because of
climate
 change. Sometimes in the monsoon season no rain so,
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 yield
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decreased
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Therefore
, farmers have no money to harvest other crops and market demand has
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increased.
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results
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, inflation has
been
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increased.
Moreover
, the
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 of
weather
condition
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of
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sea
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 level has
become
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significantly increased so, it
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fishing industries.
On the other hand
, for many companies, the changing
weather
conditions
 are
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 way to grow.
This
 is because
climate
changes
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create
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 new demands.
For instance
, In 2019, Dehli was covered to smoke in the month of October and
according to
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 of India in
this
 month
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sales
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 of air-purified and anti-pollution
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 increased by around 100%.
Likewise
, poor rainfall
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raises
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demand
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of
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rain water
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 harvesting has
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increased. In the same way , hotter
summer
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summers
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 provide manufacturers a great opportunity to sell more fans and air-conditioners. In conclusion, some people argue
business
 depends on
weather
conditions
 and it creates
nagative
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negative
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 on the
business
.
While
,
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 others convey that
business
 depends on
weather
but
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also
 it gives opportunities
many
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 companies.
However
, my opinion is that later
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 because the
business
 are capable
for
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 the changing needs of society.
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