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Nowdays it is easy to apply for and given a credit card. However,some people experience problems when they are not able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantage?

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In recent times easy
credit
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 availability to anyone has caused a problem of mounting debts for individuals who are
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 unable to pay.
This
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 is the biggest disadvantage in my opinion as it
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 traps
people
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 into taking loans and
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 puts pressure on paying back which can cause a rise in stress and crime. The banks have now got an easy tool which they advertise with
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lucrative schemes.
Credit
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 cards are like a spider's web and
people
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 using them are the prey, the more the person uses them more
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he goes into debt.
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, some
people
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 are unable to pay and are harassed by banks or collection agents.
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, the law in Australia states that any person having
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 of more than 5000 dollars can be forced to file for bankruptcy by a debtor.
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,
credit
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 cards have now become a tool for hackers, which can hack and access anyone's money. The cases of
credit
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 card fraud
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 on the rise and sometimes bank takes very little responsibility for
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. Many of the victims of cyber fraud are usually the older generation who is still learning to use it.
People
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 hard earned funds are never recovered sometimes because the hack was done in an entirely different country.
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 has caused
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major jurisdictional issues and most of the time the customer has to bear the burn. In India police have around 1600000 cases of
credit
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 fraud which have been pending for years. ,
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 the police are not equipped to handle these
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 of cases. In conclusion,
credit
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 cards are the biggest disadvantage to
people
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 which can force
people
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 into cyclic debt and create unrest in
people
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's life.
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