People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchases. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Few individuals think that
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technology
is making individuals sociable, whereas others think it is making them less sociable. In my opinion,
technology
can be an effective means of communication. After all, everything is becoming a digital system these days. On the one hand, modern
technology
,
such
as smartphones, has made
people
comfortable communicating and communicating. Indeed, the world is quickly becoming a global hub where
people
are comfortable interacting and communicating with others without having to meet them physically. In my opinion,
this
is good for those who are shy or don't want to show up. Nowadays, many
people
work or find jobs with the help of modern
technology
, the Internet. According to statistics, in Kazakhstan, when there was no internet, there were very few employees, and now many of them work online and wages rose by forty
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.
On the other
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there is a negative side.
Technology
develops as much, all data is stored in them. And not a few
people
have faced the problem of
this
technology
.
For example
: hacking, cyber
attack
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,
fraud
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and fraud
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. In fact, there was even a break-in at the banks. In
this
case, the bank and ordinary
people
suffered. To conclude, modern
technology
has improved the lives of many
people
by making communication easy.
People
should
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to utilize these innovative advancements to stay abreast of digital trends.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cashless transactions
  • Financial footprint
  • Interest rates
  • Credit score
  • Consumerism
  • Debt accumulation
  • Expenditure tracking
  • Fraudulent activities
  • Overspending
  • Purchase protection
  • Revolving credit
  • Creditworthiness
  • Impulse buying
  • Secured credit card
  • Unsecured credit card
  • Spending limit
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