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DATE- 26th nov 22 Scientists believe that eating fast-food is harmful to one’s health. Some people think that education can help them change that bad habit. Others, however argue that education does not work. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Nowadays,
education
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 is crucial for everyone. All
individual
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individuals
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 must get that because by the gain of educational
knowledge
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 one can easily survive in
this
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 modern world. Some researchers believe that consuming
fast-
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fast food
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food
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 is injurious
for
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to
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health
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.
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, some
individual
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individuals
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 think that
having
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by having
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an
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apply
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educational
knowledge
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, one can change that bad habit.
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, some
persons
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people
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also
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 comment that it does not
work
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. In
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essay
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 I will
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discuss
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discus
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discuss
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 both views and give my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand,
education
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 is significant and
also
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 it can help
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people
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 to gain
knowledge
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 about
downside
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the downside
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 of having fast
food
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. If individuals are educated
then
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 they know
that
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apply
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how
junk
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food
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affect
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the
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their
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health
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.
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,
people
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 who are educated
then
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 they have all
kind
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kinds
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 of
knowledge
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 about different
junk
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food
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such
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 as what
are
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apply
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the
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ingredients
are use
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 to make that
food
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. whether it is harmful
for
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to
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 their
health
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 or not.
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, they can easily read the ingredients on the packet.
Consequently
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,
education
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 is helpful to acquire
the
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apply
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knowledge
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 about
junk
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 foods.
On the other hand
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, some
also
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 think that
education
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 does not
work
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. It is not necessary that by acquiring information about the ingredients and other things
people
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 change their bad habit to consume
fast-
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fast food
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food
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.
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,
some times
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sometimes
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people
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 are habituated to
eat
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eating
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the
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apply
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fast
food
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. They do not even care about their
health
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.
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, educated
people
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 know that having
junk
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food
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, there will be
possibilities
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possibility
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 to have
health
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 issues
such
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 as
fatty
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a fatty
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liver
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lever
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liver
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, blood pressure, diabetes, and cancer.
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, they do not care about their body. Even sometimes uneducated
people
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 are smart and they know the disadvantage of eating
junk
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food
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. Agglomerating all the above points elaborated I will like to conclude that
education
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 is crucial, but it does not
work
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 in the case of consuming fast
food
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 because the maximum
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people
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number of people
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 who are educated consume more fast
food
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. Even uneducated
people
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 are aware
to
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of
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 the downside of consuming it.
Consequently
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,
education
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 does not
work
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 to change the bad habit of eating it.
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