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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
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The bar graphs compare the proportion of
water
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 consumption in three major categories by six distant areas of the world.
It is clear that
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North
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America
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 and
Europe
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water
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 usage was mainly for industrial purposes.
However
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, other places use
water
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 mainly for agriculture.
Europe
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 is the highest area in industrial
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 consumption
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 about 53% which is more than North
America
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 by 5%.
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, in both areas , nearly
one third
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 of
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water
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the water
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 is directed to
the
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farming procedures at 32% for
Europe
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 and 39% for North
America
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. Citizens of
Europe
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 consume 15% of
whole
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the whole
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water
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 supply compared to 13% of people living in North
America
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. In the rest of
world
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the world
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, more than
two thirds
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two-thirds
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 of
water
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 are used for watering crops and central Asia countries use nearly 90% of total
water
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 for
this
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 purpose. Using
water
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 in
industry
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the industry
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 is less than 10% in Africa and Central Asia and just above 10% in South East Asia. Among all countries, domestic use is the highest in South
America
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 by about 20% of the whole
water
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 provided.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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