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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Many
people
 prefer to move to the most developed
country
 in order to achieve their
desire
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goal
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. Nowadays,
people
 want to do their
job
 or study
in
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overseas. It contains positive effects, as well as negative effects for those living in abroad. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both pros and cons
regarding
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 living and working
in
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overseas.
Firstly
, the benefit of living in a foreign
country
 is for the betterment of life. The reason behind
this
 is, they can meet with different
sort
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 of
persons
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people
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.
Furthermore
, they will get the chance to learn
new
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 language on account of better
opportunity
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.
This
 leads to
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their
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chances of getting
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a promotion
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promotion
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 when they return.
Secondly
, in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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countries
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, there is an equality of distinct
people
. Eg: if you are doing any
job
 whether
its
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odd
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an odd
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job
 or
the
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job
 related to your field, you will be highly paid.
This
,
however
, makes no difference between lower and
higher position
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people
.
Consequently
, you can spend your life easier in a financial way.
On the contrary
, drawbacks are
also
 included for those living in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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countries
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. They need to work hard in order to feed their family. Most
of
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the
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people
 probably get up early in the morning, depart for their work and return home
with
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tiredness. It turns out to spend the least time with their family.
Moreover
,
in
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overseas you need to do household chores
by
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 your own. Many
people
 help their family members as soon as they return from their
job
.
Additionally
, there is no
any
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rule to keep
maid
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a maid
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 for your assistance. It makes those
people
to
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get under the weather. To summarise, living in a developed
country
 contains pros and cons.
In
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positive
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 side, you can spend a better quality of life and live with equality among all
people
.
However
, in
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the negative
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, working hard & due to
burden
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 of work can make you sometimes ill. Personally, I
belief
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advantages
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 regarding personal growth.
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