Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In today’s contemporary world, as social media and modern technologies have become an integral part of our lives, it has changed the way of sending and
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receiving
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cash
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as from friends, relatives and businesses. From my point of view,
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transferring
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money
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the aid of the internet and mobile phones is a positive development and
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reason why it is a positive development is that
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it is considered one of the easiest and fastest ways of
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money
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to other people
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with in
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a short period of time without waiting in
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as national banks.
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gives an opportunity for humans to transfer their
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, majority of the parents send
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to their children who are studying
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abroad countries
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the aid of the internet since it is possible to transfer
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certain
amount
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of
money
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from one account to another
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distance. To be sure,
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kind of
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money converting
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process can be dangerous since nowadays
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increasing day by day
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therefore
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possibility of being under a cyber attack while
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, these days majority of the business owners have accomplished
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number of
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while
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process might require
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additional
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expenses
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expences
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while
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transferring
a big
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money
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, it is not considered much
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sending a small
amount
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of
cash
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. To conclude, having weighed
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everything
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everything
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, I
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that
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from one account to another is not a negative development in human history,
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, it allows us to send our
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easier and faster way while giving a chance to
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transfer
transferring
the
money
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to the
further
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locations of the world.
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