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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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 day and age, a myriad number of employers demand their staff to keep in touch, notwithstanding the holidays. Personally, I consider the disadvantages of
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 the advantages. In the following
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 of all, the requirement of managers is considered to be absolutely awful since every individual deserves a rest day without any distractive notifications and calls from
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managers should provide more space and leisure time for employees because they have
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 and personal life.
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, many folks could not always work on high
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 and distractive messages and calls from
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stress, anxiety and
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Constant connectivity
  • Workplace availability
  • Crisis management
  • Decision-making
  • Competitive edge
  • Prompt response
  • Flexibility
  • Autonomy
  • Remote work
  • Work-life balance
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Personal time
  • Discontent
  • Morale
  • Productivity
  • Proper delegation
  • Team trust
  • Employee well-being
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