Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A number of individuals believe that for high school learners almost all school subjects are essential, while others tell adults should learn only the subjects, that they will use after leaving their
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I will discuss these two viewpoints in a depth. Nowadays we are living in a world where technology is almost everything
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well developed, including education systems too.
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a lot of opportunities for people, especially for
students
. There is a number of international universities
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as YOGO or GIGO Inc. in Japan are strongly said that
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students
should learn only the most important sciences like mathematics, physics or geometry, because, they told that, it will be easier to make them
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in their work in the future, so that perhaps they separate
students
into groups,
such
as group A of geography or group G of mathematics. By doing
this
kind of method they are occupying their stage in the international charts.
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, being into only
one
subject
is not a common way to improve personal abilities, said the professor of “Gajami” university in India. The majority of people think that
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students
should study more despite their interests because by learning only
one
subject
, they might have a huge amount of problems in the future.
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, there is a person who is very into history, so he is going to be a teacher of history in the future but do not means that
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he will teach
students
only
one
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, history now,
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he has to know geography and literature as well because there a lot of projects by working with the map. In conclusion, despite personal interest, humans should be into almost
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subject
as well as possible, because the modern lifestyle is demanding it from us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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