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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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be in touch , even on vacations . As far as
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detrimental
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 effect on both companies as well as individuals On the one hand , it is an advantage to the company to predict possible coming issues and establish better communication with a worker.
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 on firm income , as well as employee career development
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 there are several drawbacks to associations that closely
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 firms that closely
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 , companies should contact only in emergency situations .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Constant connectivity
  • Workplace availability
  • Crisis management
  • Decision-making
  • Competitive edge
  • Prompt response
  • Flexibility
  • Autonomy
  • Remote work
  • Work-life balance
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Personal time
  • Discontent
  • Morale
  • Productivity
  • Proper delegation
  • Team trust
  • Employee well-being
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