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the average length of video advertisements on the internet and the average length of time viewers spend watching them differs. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary

The table shows the
amount
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 of
time
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 ten different
advertisement
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 topics ran online and the
length
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 people continued to watch them. There was a large variation between streaming times allocated to different commercial categories. The average
time
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viewers
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had
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spent watching outdoor commercials was substantially higher than indoor activity
advertisements
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. The highest
amount
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 of
time
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,
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, was spent on public service
advertisements
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 (18.5
seconds
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 on average)
,
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and
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followed by financial services and automotive ads, which were viewed, on average, 16.3
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second
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seconds
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 and 14.7
seconds
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, respectively.
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, the
time
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in which
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which
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when
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 indoor products and activities were watched varied between a range of 7.1
seconds
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 (for consumer electronics) and 4.5
seconds
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 (for other retail). The table shows the
amount
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 of
time
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 ten different
advertisement
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 topics ran online and
the
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a
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length
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people
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of people
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 continued to watch them. There was a large variation between streaming times allocated to different commercial categories. The average
time
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viewers
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had
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spent watching outdoor commercials was substantially higher than indoor activity
advertisements
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. The highest
amount
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 of
time
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,
for example
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, was spent on public service
advertisements
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 (18.5
seconds
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 on average)
,
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apply
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and
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apply
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followed by financial services and automotive ads, which were viewed, on average, 16.3
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second
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seconds
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 and 14.7
seconds
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the
time
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in which
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which
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when
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 indoor products and activities were watched varied between a range of 7.1
seconds
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 (for consumer electronics) and 4.5
seconds
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 (for other retail).
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, another interesting observation, is that on average less than half of the
length
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 of all
advertisements
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are
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is
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 viewed.
Viewers
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 skip the
advertisement
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 mostly after approximately 18 to 4
seconds
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. Commercials related to public service take an average of 45
seconds
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, but are skipped after less than
one
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one-third
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third
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has
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have
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 played. It seems that
viewer
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viewers
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 tolerate watching
the
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most
length
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 of
ads
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the ads
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 related to travel (more than three fourth) and financial services (only about one quarter is skipped). Overall, the
time
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length
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viewers
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 watch an
advertisement
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 varies according to the topic of the
advertisement
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, but is generally in a narrow range between 4 to 18
seconds
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, despite the actual
length
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 of the commercial.

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