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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
shoe
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show
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 a current industrial area to the east of
Norbitonand
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Norbiton and
 redevelopment plans.
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, the goal is to
redevelope
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develop
redevelop
redeveloped
 into a residential neighbourhood with additional housing and other supporting facilities. Currently, there is a roundabout that connects a southern and an eastern
road
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, with several factories in that area that are to be removed in the redevelopment. The area around the eastern
road
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 is to be for housing, a school
at the end
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, and a playground to the north. Another
road
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 is planned to be added north from the
round about
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roundabout
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 and over a river, with housing along the western side of the
road
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. The farmland north of the river is to be replaced by additional
ousing
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housing
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 where a
road
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 parallel to the river is to be
cnstructed
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constructed
instructed
 and linked to the northbound
road
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. There are
also
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 plans to construct another
road
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 northwest
from
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of
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 the roundabout. More housing is to be built along one side and
at the end
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 of
this
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road
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. To the southwest of the roundabout, shops are planned to be constructed. Across the street to the southeast is to be a medical centre. A second roundabout is
also
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 to be added where the south
road
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 currently meets the main
road
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 in a T-intersection.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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