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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
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 will is a very strong factor which plays a key role in
people
’s lives. Some claim that nothing can be done for an unpleasant condition namely
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 career or low income, while many insist that an individual has a powerful ability to alter what makes his life miserable and enhance the situation. I entirely agree with the latter statement that free will can change everything.
This
 essay provides some explanations regarding both given views. On the one hand, there are those who
advocates
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of
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yielding to unsatisfied circumstances, making no
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 to modify their
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conditions. There might be a psychological reason behind it, which suggest
people
 resist changes. Their minds and bodies are not adoptable;
thus
 they would rather stick to the current
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 no matter how adverse it is. It can be implied that these
people
 are either lazy enough to bid more significantly or not aware of
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 capacity with regard to cognitive functions. ;
On the other hand
, those
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proponents
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 of alternation propose
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 human is equipped with a unique power to combat the situations in which they feel disagreeable.
As a result
, they will be able to make
progression
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 in the circumstances
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 them.
For instance
, there exist
people
 who begin a profession from scratch and over years with constant hardworking and high motivation, reached
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the top. There is a proverb
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 that
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 is not like a tree, if he is unhappy with the place he stands on, can move. To summarise, some
people
 suggest that unfavourable situations are inevitable
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 it is better to
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, whereas there are
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others who offer that
human
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humans
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 should try hard to modify substandard situations. In my point of view, I trust that
human
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humans
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 are capable and responsible
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for
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 improving
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their
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life ‘s
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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