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The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The charts explain
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 of different
age
 groups in France and in India during the year
of
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1984.
Overall
,
population
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the population
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 of these two countries decreased with increasing
of
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in
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age
,
although
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 of each
age
group
is
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varied among these countries.
However
,
population
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the population
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 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 is approximately
same
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the same
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 in India,
where as
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whereas
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 it is not equal in France after the
age
35
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of 35
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-40. In
india
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India
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 the growth is like a pyramid,
that is
relation
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the relation
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 between
age
group
 and
population
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the population
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 is inversely proportional. So that,
highest
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the highest
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number
 of
population
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the population
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 is reported in the
age
group
 of 0-5 and it is marked as 7%. After that
number
 of occupants
decreasing
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decreased
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 steadily with a marginal difference.
In contrast
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
peoples
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people
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 in
age
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the age
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group
of
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greater than 70 is more than 65-70.
On the other hand
, the relation between
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 and
age
group
 is almost steady between the
age
group
 of 0-5 and 30-35.
Then
 the density of
number
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a number
the number
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 of residents
declining
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declined
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upto
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up to
 the
age
group
 of 70.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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