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In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Doubyou think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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Nowadays, adolescents are inclined to spend the majority of their
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 with their friends rather than their family
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. Not only will
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 to occur but it will
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 explain my reasons why I believe
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 should forcibly make their
children
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 spend more
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 at home. The technological era and the fast-paced world that people live in these days have made the gap between generations grow large. To illustrate, youngsters usually opt to live in the virtual world of social media,
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 as Facebook, and electronic games, in which, they can find peers with mutual interests that they may not find with their family
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.
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, most millennial
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 work for extended hours in order to fulfil the needs of their families;
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, they do not get free
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 to integrate themselves into their
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’s lives. If the gap between fosters and
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 is large, the chances of
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’s alienation will increase between them. In my perspective, being of a dire impact on all family
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,
parents
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 ought to oblige the
children
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 to devote more
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 to family in order to bridge the mentioned gap.
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,
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 are more susceptible to negative social media peer pressure if they spend most of their
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 on the Internet without proper supervision, which may lead to deviation in their morals, as per several studies by human development specialists. Another impact, many hours staying away from
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 can cause bonds between family
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 to weaken, and
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 may breed crime among
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 due to lack of guidance. To conclude, the widespread trend of
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 sparing more
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 with friends might be attributable to the distance in interests and lack of
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, and I opine that forcing
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 to spend more
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 with their families is of utmost importance.
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