ou recently went shopping at a department store and you were disrespected by one of the employees. Let him/her know about the rude behavior of the clerk Clearly state how it happened And tell the manager about the bad behavior

Dear Sir or Madam Hello store manager. I am writing
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letter to you because I want to complain about your employee. I went to
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shop one day. You have an employee here. She is very rude and disrespectful to buyers. She was rude to me. I wanted to buy
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an ome
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ome
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some
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shirt.
Then
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price. She said that if you can get it for sure do not ask the price if you cannot. I left
th
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the
store not knowing what to do. I logged in again after a few days. You have another employee. I asked her the prices. She disrespected me by being rude again. She is very mean and disrespectful. If she treats other shoppers like that, surely
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one else will come to that store. Please tell her to treat buyers well and respect all buyers. I hope that
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situation will not be repeated when I go again. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully Jòrayeva
Shahlo
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Shahla
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