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You recently went shopping at department store and you were disrespected by one of the employees

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Dear manager
l
 am
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customer who recently
l
 went shopping to your shop . But
l
 did not
contenid
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contend
content
 to your service . So that one of your
employer
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treat
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with me very badly. So
l
 am writing
this
 letter to ask you to solve
this
 problem One day
l
 was going
to
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 a new
dress
 so
l
 went to your shop to
shopping
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. And
l
 saw a blue
dress
 in there ,
l
relly
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 like it because it is very
beatiful
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beautiful
and
l
 think it is
relly
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suitable for me .
Then
l
 want to put it on so
l
call
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shop assistant . she came and she said that me "How can
l
 help you " and
l
 tell her
l
 am going to put on that
dress
 neglect me and she said "No doing it " .
l
 was surprised and quiet angry for her . Because it is
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customers'
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 right
which
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to put on
dress
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the dress
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 so
l
 have within my right to put it on when
l
 told her about that, she was angry
me
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 and she treated me badly .I am your customer for a long time but none treat me like that yet. Because
of
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l
 respect you
l
 did not petition for you and
intead
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instead
 of it
l
 tall you about all
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. And
l
 hope that you understand me right and you can solve
this
 problem
Your
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 faithfully Malika Akmalovna
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