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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is ? what measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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In
last
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the last
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 few decades,
car
 sales were increased enormously.
However
, our
transport
facility
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facilities
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 are unable to accommodate
such
 copious growth, which in turn leads to the
traffic
 Jam in most of the cities around the world. I do feel that increasing
the
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car
 ownership is one major cause of high
traffic
 jams in big cities. The essay discusses how crowding of vehicles creates a rush on the
road
 and
role
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the role
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 of government to reduce the same via incorporating suitable
infrastructure
development
.
To begin
 with,
influence
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the influence
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 of
increase
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the increase
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 of
car
 owners on
traffic
 across the major cities- the key reason was
high
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the high
a high
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person to
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person-to-vehicle
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vehicle
 ratio and space constraints in
existing
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the existing
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road
transport
system
.
Firstly
, if
number
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a number
the number
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 of
car
 owner
increase
 ,
vehicle
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the vehicle
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 per person will be higher which leads to
traffic
.
For instance
, earlier people depends on public
transport
, where the
number
 of
vehicle
 requirement person was less.
Hence
, it is apparent that
existing
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the existing
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system
 can accommodate the
vehicle
 and ultimately
traffic
 will be less.
Secondly
, existing
infrastructure
ambiguous
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is ambiguous
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the
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about the
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number
 of light motor vehicles
on
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in
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 the
transport
 sector.
For example
, the rate of
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 increased rapidly. But, the extension of
roads
, space increment,
additional
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and additional
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 new
roads
are
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is
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 not sufficient to equalise
this
 rapid change in the
car
 numbers on the
road
.
Although
,
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apply
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 the
number
 of
four wheeler
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four-wheeler
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 owner increment can cause
traffic
 , we cannot avoid
this
 because of
increase
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the increase
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of
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in
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 population and high life expectancy in
this
 era.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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 can contribute to
avoid
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avoiding
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such
traffic related
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traffic-related
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 issues
by
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through
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road
development
 programmes and
give
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giving
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 a proper
traffic
 rule
system
.
Firstly
, an adequate broadening and construction of new
roads
 and appropriate
fly overs
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flyovers
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 can resolve the issue
some
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to some
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 extent. Because of improving
road
infrastructure
,
system
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the system
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 can accommodate
this
increase
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increased
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number
.
Secondly
, the authorities should incorporate proper
traffic
 rules and special
road
 for four wheelers which could reduce the problems related to rush on
roads
.
This
 is evident from how some of the recent
development
on
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in
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 the
infrastructure
,
fly overs
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flyovers
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 help to reduce the
traffic
 in some cities. To conclude,
by
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apply
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taking an appropriate step by the government in the
transport
system
development
 can address the
traffic
 problems associated with big towns.
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