Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
This
is the era or
globalisation and world trade and business. Correct your spelling
of
This
has enabled us to keep better diplomatic and business relationship
with many other Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
countries
and products
produced in a country
could easily be found in another country
. However
, this
requires the products
and foods to be travelled to a long distance before reaching to
the consumers of other Change preposition
apply
countries
and this
has both negative and positive consequences. In my opinion, this
has far more advantages
than the
drawbacks.
On one hand, a Correct article usage
apply
country
should first
try to be self-sufficient rather than relying heavily on imported goods. Foods, vegetables and fruits should not be imported from other countries
since the long distance
travel of Add a hyphen
long-distance
such
commodities degraded their food values. Moreover
, importing from other countries
is quite costly. Finally
, a country
should try to produce daily necessities by themselves
as it would eradicate Correct pronoun usage
itself
the
poverty, Correct article usage
apply
unemployment
and would Correct word choice
and unemployment
also
make sure the better economic progress of a country
.
On the contrary
, the advantages
of the global economy and trade are highlighted often and it is true that being self-sufficient for all countries
are
quite impossible. Some Change the verb form
is
countries
are better for agriculture, some for industrial productions
, some for food processing and some others for technologies and Fix the agreement mistake
production
thus
each nation has their
unique ability to do well in some specific sectors. Correct pronoun usage
its
Thus
no country
can locally produce everything their
people need. Correct pronoun usage
its
First
and foremost Correct article usage
The first
advantages
of importing Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
products
from other countries
is that a country
can enjoy those short
of goods without even producing them. Replace the word
shortage
For instance
, many countries
enjoy tea and coffee even though they do not locally produce them. Second
, sometimes importing is less expensive than producing something and not every country
has the environment and manpower to do so. Third
, transportation
system nowadays is becoming more efficient and in the near future, it will take less time to supply goods from another Correct article usage
the transportation
country
to another. The global economy enables a country
to export products
to other nations rather than wasting them and this
has proven to be a strong revenue earning
area for many Add a hyphen
revenue-earning
countries
. People nowadays have more choices of their products
and global
economy hit the monopoly so hard that people can enjoy Add an article
the global
global
branded Change the adjective
globally
products
at a competitive price.
In summary, more time to transport daily commodities from one country
to other has some demerits. However
the endless Add a comma
,However
advantages
they bring are quite overwhelming.Submitted by Alizadeh_masoud_93 on
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