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the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

It was obvious that China was the country that had the most electricity production and consumption while the United States stayed in the 2nd position and Russia
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 the 3rd. From the 4th to the 6th ranking, there were countries like Japan, India and Canada. The
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 four nations from 7th to 10th were France, Brazil, Germany and the Republic of Korea. As depicted in the chart, with 5395
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 and 4099
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 produced and 5322
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 and 3866
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 consumed, China and the USA were the top 2 nations with the both highest energy production and consumption. The amount of energy produced and consumed
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 these two had overweighed the counterparts totalized from the 3rd to the 10th. With 1057
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 generated and 1038
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 used, Russia ranked 3rd and was the only country with these 2 digitals more than 1000
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. Korea, Rep. stayed at the
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 position with the numbers of 485.1
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 generated and 449.5
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 used. Of all these ten nations, almost every country had a larger generation than consumption in the amount of energy except Germany, whose had used more electricity than they produced.

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