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In some cities, government has tried to tax the owners of the vehicles, for example to reduce the traffic congestion. Do you think it is a positive or a negative impact?

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In the fast-paced world, some countries are imposing higher taxes to maintain the lower vehicle flow on the roads. Nowadays, more and more
vehicles
 are on
road
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the road
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, because every family has their own vehicle.
This
 may lead to traffic problems and air pollution as well. In my opinion,
this
 will
be
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have
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 a positive impact on pollution and traffic control as well. On the one hand, controlling new
vehicles
 on the road is better to practice to maintain not getting overflow on the road. Many people are interested
to use
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 their personal vehicle for their work, in spite of public
transportation
. Minimizing the usage of own
vehicles
 and travelling by public transport for commuters is
also
 the best thing. Every citizen should know the cause &
effects
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and effects
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 of pollution by using
vehicles
. Public institutes should focus can
save
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 their budget by buying gas and petrol from other countries.
On the other hand
, metro cities are having more and more number of peoples and they are settled outside of the cities. Usually, they don't have proper
transportation
 facilities. These types of families need to own a personal car for daily life like work, groceries, and school. So, the government should allow them low taxes.
However
,
transportation
 authorities should check for more public
transportation
 facilities. In conclusion, the public entity should focus on educating people to utilize public
transportation
. They could offer discounts on tickets or more services for passengers.
Finally
, maintaining good
transportation
 is better than higher taxes for using personal
vehicles
.
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