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In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reason and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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In today's Era ,
workload
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 has become a competitive place in which
employees
 have to be
a
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genius in any
field
 . Among the
skills
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,skills
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 social and good qualification are the most important in my opinion good qualification has greater importance than social
skills
 .
Further
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 exposition will bolster my view.
First
 of
all
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,all
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 everyone is running in the race
of
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for
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 success .Competition has increased so much due to
high
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a high
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number of
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population .Every
field
 is hiring little bit number of
Pupil
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pupils
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 but
line
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the line
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 of aspirants
so
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is so
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 long
and
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that
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 only
few
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a few
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 get
chance
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a chance
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 to be selected
from
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apply
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.Some departments hire those
employees
 who have social
skills
 so they can contact
to
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apply
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new
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the new
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 customer make them attracted towards their product and have proper
knowledge
 of communication.
For instance
 ,
every
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in every
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 car showroom or any other kind of platform which have to face every day or interact with new people
they
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prefer those
employees
which
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who
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 can handle and tell all the information related to the needs of the customer .
In
addition
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 workers have to perform various
role
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roles
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 in their jobs .
Moreover
,in banks or in food chain restaurants labour
work
on
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in
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 the other place
to
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too
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 and everyone must
aware
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be aware
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 of
the
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each
responsibilities
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responsibility
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.
On the other hand
, I feel proper qualifications
plays
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play
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 a vital role in employee life .
A proper
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Proper knowledge
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knowledge
 is a key to success .Every
field
 higher according to the university is
degree
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a degree
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 if they have proper
knowledge
 about the stream or not
for instance
 in pharmacy like there is a specific course to become a pharmacist and all other various
degree
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degrees
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 contain there different
type
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types
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 of study .
Moreover
 , if anyone
study
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studies
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 some things for years
then
 the ability
of
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to
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work
 and
knowledge
 to
work
 the course will be increased .
In addition
hiring
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,hiring
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 qualified
employees
 will be in better idea
over
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than
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 social
skills
 .Companies have to spend less money on training
of
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new
employees
 because they have already proper
knowledge
 about the
work
 .
Hence
 to conclude both
the
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qualities play
different
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the different
a different
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role
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roles
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 I believe qualification in
specific
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the specific
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field
 has greater importance
that
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than
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 social
skills
.
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