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Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is a government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is individuals responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the modern world , there is a new habit which is called fast food culture. Time is limited,
therefore
 our diet is becoming unhealthy with harmful sugar ingredients. Because of that , some
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 that governments should make resolutions about reduce to carbohydrate consumption , while others believe the opposite. In
this
 essay , I will discuss both viewpoints and explain my idea. Start with , why are people eating too much
carbohydrate
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. With or without our knowledge every product which is packed in a store has a fair amount of energy.
This
 energy comes from the harmful proportion of sugar. According to World Health Organisation (
WHO)
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 obesity has been significantly increased
last
 decade because our
product
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including preserver and even vegetable or plant-based food is genetically changed. In that case , the person who wants to eat 5 in 1 can not control
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the production phase.
Therefore
 , a bureaucracy should take
controls
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 with their hands.
On the other hand
 , individually , we are
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independent people who
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 in the twenty-
first
 century. Nobody should poke their nose into our lives even
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they think about our wellness.
Additionally
, every member of society may learn what is the secret of
the
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 long life and why
is
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sugar is dangerous for our bodies. Apart from the governments , society may establish
to
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the
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 unit which is helpful to a healthy life and support themselves. To sum up , in my opinion , within the states or not ,
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the population
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 can take to control and reduce harmful substances with their good lifestyles.
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