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Some people think that all University students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as though related to Science and Technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
There is a diversity of
subjects
 which one can
study
in
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 a
University
. A section of
people
suggest
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 that students of a
University
 should only
study
subjects
 revolving around Science and Technology the
subjects
 that can true fruitful in the future; whereas another section feels that
University
 students must be given
freedom
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 to
study
 any subject that they prefer.
This
 acid both the arguments and explain my opinion for the latter view.
Firstly
 looking at the group of
people
 advocating for the Science and Technology related subject; they believe that the main aim of
University
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 education is to get better job opportunities and earn more money. These
people
 believe that can be achieved by studying the
subjects
 of Science and Technology only as these fields 10
to
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have greater financial advantages.
However
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 I am in complete agreement with the
population
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 thinking of letting
people
study
 whatever they want. They believe to
study
 properly and Excel one should enjoy what they
study
. Studies and Research show that if those fields are being learnt, in which a student has great curiosity, the chances of excelling are very high. In my own personal experience, when I studied mathematics
in
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the
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apply
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university
, I never enjoyed mathematics and always found it difficult to score
good
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 in
the
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apply
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mathematics which was very stressful. To conclude and environmental student studying a variety of
subjects
 of their
likings
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liking
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 will definitely be a better option as it will bring less stress and better life among the students.
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  • diversity in research
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  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
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