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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams above indicate the average proportions of three nutrients
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 in typical meals, which can be harmful to people who live in the USA if consumed too much. The percentages of mentioned nutrients in breakfast, lunch, dinner, and
snacks
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 are shown in the charts.
It is clear that
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sodium
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 and saturated fat have the biggest
portion
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 in the dinner meal,
while
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 added
sugar
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 is mostly used in
snacks
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. The highest
portion
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 of nutrients which is consumed at dinner refers to
sodium
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with
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 43%,
while
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 saturated fat and added
sugar
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 have 37% and 23%. Lunch meals in the USA contain approximately the same share of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 with 29%, 26%, and 19% respectively. Through breakfast and
snacks
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,
sodium
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 has exactly the same segment which is 14%, but the case is different for others. Added
sugar
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 with 42% is mostly used in
snacks
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 and the second highest
portion
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 refers to saturated fat with 21%, but both of them with 16% have the same
portion
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 in breakfast.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, snacks, portion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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