The diagrams below show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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THESE DIAGRAMS ILLUSTRATE THERE VARIOUS STAGES IN THE DEVELOPMENT OF primitive MATERIAL FOR COOKING.
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, THE CHANGE SHOW AS A,B AND C ALL THESE INDEPENDENT IN STONE ,CLAY AND METAL LIKE THE BASIS FOR
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EQUIPMENT. IF WE HAVE A FLEETING GLANCE IT IS NOTICEABLE HOW SIMPLE OF THE MACHINE IS UNTIL COMPLETE THE PROCESS OF UPDATING
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EQUIPMENT TO ARRIVE AT A COMPLEX AND MODERN LOOK.
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, IN A WE SEE A ENORMOUS VAS MADE OF CLAY,
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THE THERE IS STON AND A NUMBER OF TWIGS AND PAPER TO WORK IT.
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DEMONSTRATES B A tiny STEP TO IMPROVE, THE SHIELD REMAIN THE HEAT FOR A LONG TIME AND PROTECTS THE FIRE FROM WIND AND WATER.
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, THE HUGE DEVELOPMENT IN C IN
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TIME
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APPARATUS WAS MADE BY METAL
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IT reach out THE HEATER FASTER ,
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THE HANDLE GIVE SAVES TRANSPORTATION,
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THE LINING IS ESTABLISHED FROM CLAY ,
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THE DOOR KEEPS THE ASH INSIDE AND CONTROLS THE HEATER. IF WE GO TO UP THE LOCATION OF GRATE OF CHARCOAL.
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