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it is more important for a building to serve its purposes than to look beautiful. Architects do not need to worry about whether it is a real work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

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Buildings play a prominent role in human culture from the past to the present. They are the ones that stand out as marvels that describe the city's landscape. The main objective of these structures is to serve their purpose,
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 from ancient to modern society these are treated as the symbol of pride and to stand unique among the global community. The visual representation of the building shows both the engineering achievement and the imagination of the artist. The hard work and special methods used in the construction are well preserved in their physical form. The thought process of community through the narrator's eyes is well represented in the shape and styling of the structure.The wonderful and special aspects of the building represented on the world stage attract more tourists and generate more revenue. The culture of the city is well described on the walls of the monument and making it reliable for future generations to learn in an enthusiastic way. The structures from the archaeological sites are the prime example of determining the age-old ways the civilization, which describes the way of living in those days through hard proof. In my opinion, art with solid foundations
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 as buildings, towers, and walls not only serves its primary purpose but
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 serves the integrity of the nation.
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